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For some people shopping can be very addicting. This can be especially true for women. They can spend many hours shopping at many kinds of stores. 

Shopping can be a good hobby if you want to be fashionable. You can keep up with the latest trends and always stay in fashion. But on the other hand, if one shops too much, then perhaps they will have much less money, and even get too addicted to shopping. 

Shopping is also beneficial for the economy. As consumers buy, the businesses get money and can continue to work. 

I sometimes also go shopping, but I try to do it in moderation. I think that is the most important when it comes to addicting hobbies like shopping.